Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: My Plan for Forgetting Youdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 774
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 355



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMy Plan for Forgetting Youdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I'm hoping to forget you by replacing my memories with new thoughts, so I overload my senses.
    Television and books keep me from thinking of you,
    and I learn every new song I hear,
    hoping that filling my brain with nonsense
    will push out my remembrances
    of you out my ear,
    and the pain will evaporate forever.




    Submitted on 2004-06-19 04:00:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      damn i HATE it when you get someone in your head and under your skin and you just cant not think about them no matter what you fill your world with... good luck with getting them out of you...
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem, for example, is prime trouble for the picking. The whole poem itself, no offense, of course, has meaning, and clear meaning, at that. But your Romantic (capital for a reason) methodology to poetry is both self-centered and overly straightforward. If you hid your meanings a little more, the ideas would be even more satisfying in their reading. The biggest thing about your poetry that disappoints me is the fact that when I search for the hidden meanings, very often I don't find any. It would do this poem a world of good to obscure the actions, say putting the first line as the last, or omitting it altogether and making us guess a little, or shortening "hoping that filling my brain with nonsense" to something more like "Hoping the nonsense/ will push out the ringing/ of you out of my ears."

    I've said it once, I'll say it again. I'm biased, and all I can give is what I know.
    | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by EternitysLyre | [ Reply to This ]
      this was great, its horrible when a person takes up all of your senses when you and the other person has broken up, b/c the last thing you reallywanna think about is them but you always have them in your mind constantly b/c of the hurt. great write i truly loved it!
    | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      You have captured and expressed this so well. This poem is well written and affective. It is also something all people can relate to.
    "Hoping that filling my brain with nonsense
    Will push out my remembrances
    Of you out my ear
    And the pain will evaporate forever"
    | Posted on 2004-06-19 00:00:00 | by Belle De Jour | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the poem but I strangely think it won't work...maybe the music part but mindless tv just lets your mind drift...usually to what you don't want to think about.
    | Posted on 2004-06-19 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ]
      good strategy to forget someone. I usually end up listening to a lot of songs and singing along with them too. I'm a music junkie. it helps. good poem.
    | Posted on 2004-06-19 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      it can be so hard to drive someone out of your mind. i can relate to the wanting to overload your senses so you won't think about them. music for me, however, always seems to entice those feelings more than take them away; and if i really am having a hard time, everything will make me think of that person: a line in a movie, a chapter in a book... i get the general gist of the idea here, but for me it doesn't work because of that. more power to you if it works for you! write on!
    | Posted on 2004-06-19 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    14725

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Fathoms of the Lullaby Sea written by HisNameIsNoMore
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    To written by SavedDragon
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    cleverly shunned written by CrypticBard
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Wavelength written by saartha

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry