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I'm hoping to forget you by replacing my memories with new thoughts, so I overload my senses. Television and books keep me from thinking of you, and I learn every new song I hear, hoping that filling my brain with nonsense will push out my remembrances of you out my ear, and the pain will evaporate forever. |
damn i HATE it when you get someone in your head and under your skin and you just cant not think about them no matter what you fill your world with... good luck with getting them out of you...| Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ] | This poem, for example, is prime trouble for the picking. The whole poem itself, no offense, of course, has meaning, and clear meaning, at that. But your Romantic (capital for a reason) methodology to poetry is both self-centered and overly straightforward. If you hid your meanings a little more, the ideas would be even more satisfying in their reading. The biggest thing about your poetry that disappoints me is the fact that when I search for the hidden meanings, very often I don't find any. It would do this poem a world of good to obscure the actions, say putting the first line as the last, or omitting it altogether and making us guess a little, or shortening "hoping that filling my brain with nonsense" to something more like "Hoping the nonsense/ will push out the ringing/ of you out of my ears." | I've said it once, I'll say it again. I'm biased, and all I can give is what I know. | Posted on 2004-06-22 00:00:00 | by EternitysLyre | [ Reply to This ] | this was great, its horrible when a person takes up all of your senses when you and the other person has broken up, b/c the last thing you reallywanna think about is them but you always have them in your mind constantly b/c of the hurt. great write i truly loved it! | ![]() | Posted on 2004-06-21 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ] | You have captured and expressed this so well. This poem is well written and affective. It is also something all people can relate to. | "Hoping that filling my brain with nonsense Will push out my remembrances Of you out my ear And the pain will evaporate forever" | Posted on 2004-06-19 00:00:00 | by Belle De Jour | [ Reply to This ] | I like the poem but I strangely think it won't work...maybe the music part but mindless tv just lets your mind drift...usually to what you don't want to think about. | | Posted on 2004-06-19 00:00:00 | by joe quinn | [ Reply to This ] | good strategy to forget someone. I usually end up listening to a lot of songs and singing along with them too. I'm a music junkie. it helps. good poem. | | Posted on 2004-06-19 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ] | it can be so hard to drive someone out of your mind. i can relate to the wanting to overload your senses so you won't think about them. music for me, however, always seems to entice those feelings more than take them away; and if i really am having a hard time, everything will make me think of that person: a line in a movie, a chapter in a book... i get the general gist of the idea here, but for me it doesn't work because of that. more power to you if it works for you! write on! | ![]() | Posted on 2004-06-19 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ] | |