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    dots Submission Name: the greenish palm of my eyedots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe greenish palm of my eyedots
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    some will run their hands
    right through it
    like their mothers told them
    how not to touch
    for fear of burning.
    some will back away
    in fear
    of the green life
    that they can never know.
    i back away
    and run my hand
    right through it
    never having feared
    what my mother told me not to touch
    for fear of burning.
    it was not love,
    it was only
    the greenish palm
    of my eye.
    & i no longer fear
    what i see there...




    Submitted on 2007-07-27 12:40:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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