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    dots Submission Name: cellar doordots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotscellar doordots
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    all the world
    has the potential
    to bleed its own blood
    without my help.

    like swollen rivers
    where the mouth forms the words,
    "get out",
    & the ocean receives
    it's wayward lover, once again.

    into itself,
    & of itself...

    & how many times
    have i said goodnight,
    when the days end,
    & actually expected you to reply
    with anything other than silence?

    the vacant door
    on the other side of the bed
    has no knob,
    no key
    & nothing to open up to
    on the other side.

    there's just the endless rapping
    from my red right hand,
    keeping time to the seconds
    of every passing night.




    Submitted on 2007-07-27 12:41:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is amazing! Very well written, and the fact that it just flows without rhyming makes it unconvential. The last verse is my favorite "keeping time to the seconds of every passing night"

    Ps.) What was your inspiration for this?

    Great job!
    | Posted on 2007-07-27 00:00:00 | by AnnaBullen707 | [ Reply to This ]


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