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    dots Submission Name: another sleepless womandots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsanother sleepless womandots
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    i came in tonight
    and my building sighed.
    it was a beautiful woman
    stretching in the morning.
    all brunette
    & gauzy white.

    my dreams of you
    are always softer
    than you are.
    my dreams
    must need a goddess
    & it seems
    she has your face.

    & you may stay awhile in my heart...

    my image of your languorous arms
    & fists slowly stretching
    through the early day.
    as if monday
    were another sleepless womans body.

    two of you makes the universe complete.
    the embrace of you makes the day so sweet
    because i am the author.

    the other woman is dark & green
    & curly, full of rocks
    & sauce
    & dark lights hanging
    in the sky.




    Submitted on 2007-07-27 12:41:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sounds exciting but I wonder who/what that other woman is?
    | Posted on 2007-08-04 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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