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    dots Submission Name: the neon of winterdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 532
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsthe neon of winterdots
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    & the extreme fantasy...
    life imitates life again!
    as with strange birds often do,
    & with such laborious inclines,
    stroke the suns inside them.

    to be overwhelmed by the horror
    & the penitent hands
    of the pious, neon of winter.

    & then to suppose
    & liken ones own self
    to the brownish earth.
    soil of my under-darling
    escape me...

    i forget to breathe bad air
    as i'm always inhaling perfection.

    dulcet, vested in the sky
    & as penultimate, heavy & darb
    as the summer sun
    that is inside me.




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      o man!
    i like this poem alot. i love the flow (its really good that your getting an "i like this poem" because i really like poems that rhyme) it has a wonderful flow to it. only a few places were the flow ...well... didnt flow..

    all in all very good
    | Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by annie smith | [ Reply to This ]


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