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    dots Submission Name: The Portrait She Painteddots

    Author: Munchie_1226
    ASL Info:    25/F/E.STL
    Elite Ratio:    4.49 - 1831/1834/185
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Portrait She Painteddots

    She hid behind fake faces
    Thinking the illusion replaces
    The reality of who SHE
    Really is

    Never acknowledging
    The truth will always be exposed
    Even when you refuse to unfold
    The facts behind the fiction

    Depiction of self morality
    Gaining undignified personality
    To put forth a persona
    Of what she WANTS to be

    Hiding from the portrait she's painted
    Never emancipated in her own prosecutions
    Putting forth falsified contributions
    Of pollution to cloud her surroundings

    There was something within
    Telling her to pretend
    To manipulate and misrepresent
    To invent and not once resent
    The infection of lies she supplies

    Contaminating minds
    With the lowest sense of ethic
    Apathetic art displayed
    As she craves the praise

    Her own form of regressions
    Soulless impressions
    Waiting to engulf her
    In the storm she self created

    Submitted on 2007-07-27 13:13:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think she needs new bags for her vacuum cleaner for she seems to be in a sort of blowing/sucking mode but not really being productive. Does that make sense?

    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]

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