"Just a Woman" by Loquacious Mind

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Submission Name: "Just a Woman" dots

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Author:	Loquacious Mind
ASL Info:	22/M/North Carolina
Elite Ratio:	8 - 274/300/93
Words:	34

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	72
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	250

Description:
she love me, she love me not...

"Just a Woman" dots

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Not to sound pious
or even demeaning,
but She holds a loaded gun
deemed 'cell phone'
pressed lightly to my heart,
& a trigger called 'tongue'
strung gently from the tethers of my soul.

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