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    dots Submission Name: Brown-Eyed TinkerBelldots
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    Author: tjsmith5
    ASL Info:    28/m/MS
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 104/104/58
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 107
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    Bytes: 769



    Description:
       Half meaning/Half poetry exercise.


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    dotsBrown-Eyed TinkerBelldots
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    A Southern writer died on Tuesday
    predictably in a coastal coffee shop
    neighboring the railroad tracks.

    Witnesses claim he stared loudly
    at the antique steam engine
    photographed in his
    grandparent's honeymoon
    before keeling over by the
    aspiring guitarist.

    Police suspect a wood Victorian
    in Savannah and the involvement
    of tequila and marinated shrimp
    and an autopsy report confirms
    the involvement of a baby blue wrangler with a brown-eyed TinkerBell accomplice.

    His last words were largely indiscernible
    though he mentioned his resurrection in May of 1996 when anything was possible for him.

    7/27/07 - Picayune, MS




    Submitted on 2007-07-27 15:44:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Heh, I loved the first stanza. How delightfully pretentious. I'd love to go in a place like that
    I don't quite understand the third stanza, though. What are you trying to say there? Is there something I'm missing?
    The line breaks in the last stanza felt a little uncomfortable. If it were me, I'd write it as 'though he mentioned his ressurrection in May of 1996/when anything was possible for him.'
    Good work, I enjoyed reading this. The dry tone was great.
    | Posted on 2007-07-27 00:00:00 | by saartha | [ Reply to This ]



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