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    dots Submission Name: Flickering Flamedots
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    Author: DBE
    ASL Info:    16 - Male - UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 30/31/24
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 79
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 863



    Description:
       I got bored and wanted to write something. I know that I've done better than this, but oh well.

    And yeah, don't comment on it, I probably wont get the chance to return the favour and I don't want to offend anyone.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsFlickering Flamedots
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    Imagine a candle
    The wick is alight
    Love is the flame
    In the darkness of night.

    Imagine an inferno
    Blazing through you
    Passion is its name
    But there's nothing you can do.

    Imagine a tornado
    Mighty and relentless
    Desire is its core
    And it leaves you helpless.

    The tornado of desire
    Will rip you apart
    Will lead you on
    Then throw away your heart.

    The inferno of passion
    Will burn you alive
    The pain will cease
    And you learn to survive.

    The candle of love,
    Will light your path,
    Easily extiguished,
    But bears no wrath.


    Value The Flickering Flame, Guard It With Your Life
    {Love Not In Excess}




    Submitted on 2007-07-27 16:50:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I spent some time reading your poems. One thing that I noticed is that they are all almost the same. If your going to write, have some versatility. Sounds like children's book poetry.
    | Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by Logic | [ Reply to This ]
      this, will simple words hits a deep spot within me and thats really hard to do, i see you write about real things. i love that in a writer. to me ( though i may be wrong, i dont know you) you seem to jusst try to realate with you reader and i lveo that to. that makes a person real

    in my opinion


    great work
    | Posted on 2007-07-28 00:00:00 | by DrkRomeo_sGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this is beautifully written. The message in this is extremely powerful but it has a bit of a subtle touch. Great Job.
    -Kaitlyn.
    | Posted on 2007-07-27 00:00:00 | by numbertwenty | [ Reply to This ]



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