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    dots Submission Name: Tell me.dots

    Author: Jakirina
    ASL Info:    19/F/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 216/200/80
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       To tell the truth. I don't know. I really don't know.

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    dotsTell me.dots

    Is there really
    more to life?
    Have you heard—
         that this is so?

    Tell me,
         tell me,
              please, tell me
              what you know.

    I hear
    we are Designed—
         for something more.

         Is there really


                   in such a word.

    What else
    is there?


              What more?

    Tell me,
         tell me,
              damn it, tell me
              what you know.

    My soul.
    Is Dying.


              Because of:

         it consumes.
         it constricts.

    I feel broken.


              Because part of me
                   is missing.

    Because I can’t
         find it.

    I just can’t
         find home.

    Tell me,
         tell me,
              DAMN it tell me!
              Tell me what you know!

    What is there!


              What is there?

    I’m so Alone,
    yet silent
         shall you stay?

    Shall silence eat
         me away as well?

    Do you want me


              as well?

    Tell me.
         Tell me.
              Fucking tell me
              what you know.


              Tell me.

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      i've never read anything like this,, i absolutly love it, its very powerful and moving and i just want to keep reading it over and over again
    | Posted on 2007-07-30 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      Well what can I say, I just really understand that feeling. There just must be more to life than THIS, right? Like the previous comments said, I like the style as well. It just reflects very well the way your thoughts seem to boil in that moment. Great job!
    | Posted on 2007-07-29 00:00:00 | by silverfragment | [ Reply to This ]
      the style of this is verry unique and interesting, it made it a verry different read. I loved this piece. it was well written and I could relate to it so well. It was like being inside someones head and almost like strugling with yourself . . . at least that's what I took away. IT's written like talking to someone else but still, I guess that's just my way of viewing it. EIther way, it is well writtin and the flow is great. I love this. Great piece, keep writing.

    | Posted on 2007-07-29 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the style of this piece. Your words come off
    very powerful in the way it's written. It seems to me that you are screaming out for answers for (God) or
    someone that you fill is holding back the truth from you.
    love and peace,
    | Posted on 2007-07-29 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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