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    dots Submission Name: a perfect love unwounddots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    jupiter's going away.
    & with still, steeple hands
    i brush aside the sky.

    there are no new futures
    for me to see there.

    live dye-cast into fuchsine
    with the superlative down fingers
    that you keep around your throat.

    death is only as romantic as you make it
    & your daily suicides of the heart
    are a given;

    splendid and mossed in timeless frenzy,
    i shift my planetary movemnts
    to avert your eyes.
    the ones as black as my bird.

    the unstoppable fantasy
    of that phonecall
    that you can't seem to make,
    blisses on my tongue
    all the inside, russian responses,
    short and full of volumes,
    that i release into your perfect
    smaller ear.

    believe in me when you're dreaming,
    & my purposeful laurels
    willl crowd around your neck
    like the necklace that you never where.

    i am still the moon
    hung over your head
    for the instant that you were capable
    of a perfect love unwound
    & bound for nothing
    but endless longing
    from afar...




    Submitted on 2007-07-29 06:31:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very good. I found it to be a refreshing start away from the rest of the other poems who feel like they repeat themselves at every single sentence.

    Kind of gets annoying after awhile though

    But my favorite line had to be

    believe in me when you're dreaming,
    & my purposeful laurels
    will crowd around your neck
    like the necklace that you never where.

    At first, I will admit it confused me.

    But once I got a close grasp at it, I was impressed.

    Good work.
    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by darkmoonchild | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow..

    Heyy birdy WSUP! hope all is good with you my talented poetic friend

    this piece was amazing..i loved every bit of it..the picture is bright

    starts beautiful and ends beautiful

    "death is only as romantic as you make it
    & your daily suicides of the heart
    are a given;"
    wonderful

    you might just wana correct your spelling (not a big deal)
    "like the necklace that you never where"= wear

    props
    | Posted on 2007-08-04 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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