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a perfect love unwound


Author: blackbird
ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194 /328 /300
Words: 172
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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a perfect love unwound



jupiter's going away.
& with still, steeple hands
i brush aside the sky.

there are no new futures
for me to see there.

live dye-cast into fuchsine
with the superlative down fingers
that you keep around your throat.

death is only as romantic as you make it
& your daily suicides of the heart
are a given;

splendid and mossed in timeless frenzy,
i shift my planetary movemnts
to avert your eyes.
the ones as black as my bird.

the unstoppable fantasy
of that phonecall
that you can't seem to make,
blisses on my tongue
all the inside, russian responses,
short and full of volumes,
that i release into your perfect
smaller ear.

believe in me when you're dreaming,
& my purposeful laurels
willl crowd around your neck
like the necklace that you never where.

i am still the moon
hung over your head
for the instant that you were capable
of a perfect love unwound
& bound for nothing
but endless longing
from afar...




Submitted on 2007-07-29 06:31:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very good. I found it to be a refreshing start away from the rest of the other poems who feel like they repeat themselves at every single sentence.

Kind of gets annoying after awhile though

But my favorite line had to be

believe in me when you're dreaming,
& my purposeful laurels
will crowd around your neck
like the necklace that you never where.

At first, I will admit it confused me.

But once I got a close grasp at it, I was impressed.

Good work.
| Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by darkmoonchild | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow..

Heyy birdy WSUP! hope all is good with you my talented poetic friend

this piece was amazing..i loved every bit of it..the picture is bright

starts beautiful and ends beautiful

"death is only as romantic as you make it
& your daily suicides of the heart
are a given;"
wonderful

you might just wana correct your spelling (not a big deal)
"like the necklace that you never where"= wear

props
| Posted on 2007-08-04 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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