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    dots Submission Name: Once Upon A Timedots
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    Author: heartless_
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 284/251/154
    Words: 383
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    Description:
       another myles poem i know you all are probably get tired of hearing about him but i have to get him out of my system so i can fully move on.


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    dotsOnce Upon A Timedots
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    Once upon a time I was lost,
    Then I met you and thought I was found.
    A little too late I discovered,
    All of your lies and deceptions.

    You led me on a path so wrong,
    Further from the place I should be.
    I wondered how I missed all the signs,
    You would disappear for days at a time,
    Without a single word as to where you were.

    Hurt and broken I begin to wonder,
    Why I didnít listen to my friends?
    Why didnít I see the signs? Once upon a time.

    I use to think you were perfect,
    Always there when I needed you,
    Sometimes before I realized I needed you,
    The right words and a smile from you meant That everything would be okay.

    Now I discovered it was all part of your game,
    Meant to keep me around & not suspecting.
    You did a grand job on that part,
    Never did I suspect a thing was wrong.

    Once upon a time I was blind,
    Believing every word you said,
    Never questioning the strange .
    Now with my eyes open I see the truth .

    Once upon a time I believed in fairy tales,
    The happily everafter & someone for everyone
    Now I know there is no real prince,
    And Iím no average Cinderella.

    For once upon a time I had a heart full of love,
    It was broken and bruised by all your lies.
    I have yet to get an apology from you ,
    Although we both know your not sorry.

    Now I know once upon a time ,
    Was just meant for the fairytales,
    For lil kids and dreamers with no hopes,
    For I see I am not meant to be happy.

    I wish I could go back in time when my heart
    Was whole, I wish I never met you.
    Once upon a time I was hurt and,
    Once upon a time I had all my dreams shattered

    This Cinderella is not meant to get her prince
    He shattered my dreams & broke my love
    Forever will I be sad, forever will I be lonely
    Forever will I dream of my once upon a time
    Nightmare without a prince to save me.




    Submitted on 2007-07-29 22:07:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good i liked it has some spelling problems but im not the one to talk you will get the right princes some day keep up your poems one day you may be famous.....
    | Posted on 2007-08-01 00:00:00 | by blue_angel | [ Reply to This ]


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