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    dots Submission Name: divine comedydots

    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 438/478/128
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsdivine comedydots

    the divine comedy is being played out
    and I am lost,
    lost in this raging inferno
    of seething emotions

    this must be purgatory,
    this not knowing
    this silence
    of words spoken through sealed lips

    paradise seems so far away
    at least, paradise with you
    and me
    and a happy ending

    Submitted on 2007-07-30 03:03:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Likening the unknown of a burgeoning relationship to purgatory is interesting and mostly probably apt. Please let me know if you have any lighter fare that you would like me to peruse. I seem to be getting just a little morose reading these current pieces of yours.
    | Posted on 2008-01-03 00:00:00 | by ErgoIgo | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't get the reference, but then I haven't been reading much of old poetry lately. I like the concept, though, and it's got every bit of the gripping word choice that imbues everything else you've got here.

    | Posted on 2007-08-02 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      Dante's Divine Comedy. I read it a couple of years ago, I got lost somewhere in the middle. I like your version, it's short. Great Job.
    Love and Peace,
    | Posted on 2007-07-30 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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