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    dots Submission Name: Im Moving Ondots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 641
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 887



    Description:
       This Is For Troy
    You Know How To Make Me Smile
    You Know I Like you
    But Im Not Ready To Commit Again
    So I Hope You Stick Wit Me Till Then


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    dotsIm Moving Ondots
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    i dont want a relationship
    we have to take things slow
    but the first night i saw you
    i knew the direction to go
    you treated me so perfectly
    knew what words to say
    thats why im sitting here
    with a smile on my face today
    you like to call me beautiful
    and even hold me tight
    you held me so close to you
    throught the dark and cold night
    i woke up in the morning
    to feel you gentle kiss upon my cheek
    your diffrent to my ex
    its so clear to see
    i wish i never met him
    i wish it was you and me
    your everything i want in a man
    everything to prove the world wrong
    i have found that perfect man
    all i have to do is hold on
    with each new day comming
    this feeling for you grows
    maybe one day soon
    i will let my feelings show




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