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    dots Submission Name: Stainsdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 486
    Average Vote:    3.5000
    Bytes: 663



    Description:
       Crap, crap, crap...


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    dotsStainsdots
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    Pieces of you still cling to me
    Like stains upon my soul
    And every piece of me desires
    Nothing more than to let you go

    Portions of you still reside
    Within my hollow chest
    And I wish that I could somehow
    Put these miserable thoughts to rest

    A stifling tension still thickens the air
    If you happen to be near by
    My heart races at the sight of your face
    I still feel the butterflies

    Pieces of you still cling to me
    And I can see my stain on you
    It's been this long, and nothing's changed
    Now what are we supposed to do?




    Submitted on 2007-07-30 09:26:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2007-09-12 00:00:00 | by Magger32 | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome poem. I can totally relate, I'm trying to figure out how to add you to my favorites but I'm new to this site and I d on't know how. Could you help me out? I'd appreciate it, thanks.=]
    | Posted on 2007-09-07 00:00:00 | by LadyDarkbane | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it! Erm I thought that the first two stanza's were very good! There is something about the third one that just not seem quite right....

    I think it just needs a bit re wording...

    other then that it is an awesome poem!!
    | Posted on 2007-07-30 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]


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