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    dots Submission Name: Is This It?dots

    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 494
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsIs This It?dots

    Is this what it's supposed to be?
    You unhappy and me alone?
    Every time I make another choice
    It takes me further from where I belong

    Is it written that this would be
    The path that we would choose?
    Two beings with so much potential
    With nothing at all to lose

    Is this what it's supposed to be?
    Is this what we were meant to do?
    You stare at me across the room
    And I can't keep my mind off of you

    Who decided we would end like this?
    Never really ending at all.
    There's so much left unfinished
    One last number left to call

    Is this what it's supposed to be?
    Should we have known it from the start?
    I alone know that smile
    And you own my heart.

    Submitted on 2007-07-30 09:27:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was good...the thought behind it has great potential...but i think it was as though you were looking for words to rhyme with..it's not bad just if you want something like this try not i think about it to much just go b insctinct...or how ever you spell it..welp it's was good other wise..keep it up
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by taintedsmiles | [ Reply to This ]
      god [censored] damn it raivn
    this is making me cry
    why does it all have to be love and sadness
    i just want to burst out crying, again
    and that is good for you, i suppose
    good job

    | Posted on 2007-08-28 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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