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    dots Submission Name: Your Never Alonedots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsYour Never Alonedots
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    Your Never Alone

    When I close my eyes I see you there.
    In a place that is nameless to me.
    Beautiful light saturates the room.
    Angels floating all-around so free.

    Breathtaking roses fall at your feet.
    You are a king at rest on your throne.
    Waterfalls in the distance sing you a song.
    You’re so peaceful sitting there all alone.

    In the distance I see gold glistening.
    These are the Gates that led you home.
    The place where you now watch over me.
    This is a beautiful place, which you now roam.

    I open my eyes to dawn a new day.
    Still I see you are there, on your throne.
    Watching me, to keep me safe,
    I know now that you're never alone.




    Submitted on 2007-07-30 09:51:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am not sure about this piece,
    are you talking to a family member
    or the lord. I get the heavenly placement and all, but the throne , I only know one throne in heaven. I do like the poem, I think its nice work.
    but its not clear to me.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      one thing: the last line doesn't make sense to me. But besides that I thought this was a good poem with a great message!!
    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]


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