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    Author: sbridges
    ASL Info:    33/F/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 119/119/63
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1218
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotswho's there?dots
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    ding! dong!

    the doorway is empty
    whos there?
    my friend? my lover?
    hes my husband
    where is he?

    lost in the workings of
    his mind-
    I want it!
    Now

    he stopped
    in his tracks
    the ones Ive spent time on
    setting traps
    hush!
    for opportunity
    to surrender in nature together
    as we abandon
    our hurt
    and walk home

    to greet eachother




    Submitted on 2007-07-30 10:07:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think I'll be reading this one over and over,
    I like it, I almost look forward to seeing the couple meet.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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