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    dots Submission Name: THE LOSSdots
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    Author: sbridges
    ASL Info:    33/F/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 119/119/63
    Words: 373
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsTHE LOSSdots
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    my mind a tornado
    (me go dizzy, round in circles)
    the outer edges of my mind- birds trapped in dollhouses, dogs with chalices
    whirling, circulating
    violently in a vertical swirl
    thinking up and down of heaven and earth
    the Source and the notion
    twisting together in deranged ways
    the nightmare I was afraid of before it actually happened
    creating a monster of disaster inside, roaring
    at me, as I rotate to not look at it
    head-on, but still it captures my grounded
    thoughts and obliterates them into a cloud
    of dusty debris of what i had known so well
    the comfort of home broken into a thousand parts,
    to be whole, nevermore,
    the wise oak tree in the backyard is flying far away,
    am I dreaming?
    my head hits hard against the steeple, cracking
    and my self-respect smashed
    against memories of loyalty and forgetfulness


    my heart a waterfall
    just as the stream becomes wider and more shallow
    just before...
    my love, caring and pure as the dove,
    was attaching to and spreading
    all over everything i was aware of
    and then, the break-
    down, crashing
    so deep at the bottom, but still smashing
    against the insensitive rocks,
    oh, those rocks, how they hurt,
    but not as much as the nausea
    in the tumbling descent,
    that horror of losing connection to the earth
    so reckless and fast the plunge,
    suffocating in feelings of deprivation
    beating at my heart
    spraying pain,
    and then the water becomes death itself,
    never enduring as it is, and constantly changing
    never holding its shape long enough
    to grasp on to it,
    and love it the way you want to


    my soul a flame
    that used to dance to your breath
    and the bathing breeze
    a blazing testament to wonder and dreams
    of the Infinite One, omnipresent like a holy spirit
    knowing everything exists somehow, and that its all God
    this fusion of All,
    turning into a purity
    that imbibes Love
    and stimulates notions
    as well as the vital Peace
    but now I realize that I have combusted
    into an inferno, burning me
    my dance erratic like spasms
    feverishly reaching for you
    as my resilience diminishes
    and a part of my essence dies.




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      I feel like I have been tornadoed however I seem to have enjoyed the experience.
    | Posted on 2010-12-27 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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