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    dots Submission Name: Torture Foreverdots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       A "sequal" to torture.


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    dotsTorture Foreverdots
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    My heart floats
    and flies around.
    Nothing exists,
    there is no ground.
    Only you
    are here with me.
    Noone else
    can I see.
    This place exists
    within my head.
    It is not true,
    but wish instead.
    I wish this hope
    would never end,
    but we can be
    only friends.




    Submitted on 2007-07-30 15:25:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sweet write dude. this truly shows ur pain.


    peace

    Grim
    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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