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    Author: DontLetGo421
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    Words: 78
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    dotsbetrayaldots
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    after all the stuff that gone down
    and all i have helped you through
    you just up and leave me
    i cant believe this is really true

    you say over and over again
    of how you hate betrayal
    i guess this was all just a test
    but i never expected you to fail

    so all that we conquered
    set it to flame into ashes
    next time you decide to betray
    i hope its you that crashes




    Submitted on 2007-07-30 18:25:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      im guessing thats about me.
    | Posted on 2007-08-05 00:00:00 | by cbgurl413 | [ Reply to This ]


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