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    dots Submission Name: First Kissdots
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    Author: Desi
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 210/151/34
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    Do you remember your first kiss?
    Did it happen something like this?

    At the movies on a Saturday night,
    sitting in the balcony laughing with delight.

    My girlfriends and I sitting in the second row,
    the guys we knew were always there too.

    Popcorn gone, now thirsty for a cool drink,
    down the stairs, to the lobby, oh was that a wink?

    Standing with his friends this guy smiled at me.
    My heart filled with butterflies, giddy as can be.

    Drink in hand back up the stairs to my friends,
    wondering should I go back down again?

    Oh, what the heck, what could it hurt,
    after all didn't he just flirt?

    Out of my seat, knees feeling weak,
    hoping he too was wanting to meet.

    There in the stairwell, I ran into him.
    He spoke to me, I spoke to him.

    Leaning over he kissed my lips.
    Can you believe it happened just like this?

    My first kiss....




    Submitted on 2004-06-19 10:57:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awwww! I loved this poem! Such a sweet story! It reminded me of my first kiss, the butterflies, the weak knees, the heat on my face as he pulled away. Young love can be so sweet.
    | Posted on 2011-01-22 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]
      My first Kiss was with a boy I liked for a long long time, and when he finally kissed me, he used his tong, I got all freaked out and ran away.. LOL.. I was pathetic! But strangely I wanted more after 5 minutes of thinking about it.
    | Posted on 2010-05-16 00:00:00 | by Devilinaskirt | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwwwwwww...was it written from experience coz that's sweet. I like the setting but have little to say on the subject as I sadly don't remember my first kiss as it was in a drunken state of apparent extacy and nobody would talk to me for weeks because i kissed someones b/f apparently... i wouldn't...but who knows...
    -AC
    | Posted on 2004-11-19 00:00:00 | by StarAcabar | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm sure all of us can relate to this and has certainly brought back memories of my first kiss. Well written and consistent flow. Great write.
    | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      that was really sweet. made me feel like a teenager all over again... my first kiss was playing spin the bottle in the 5th grade with a cutie patootie named Scott. *swoon* this read very lyrically and was almost like a little dance. very nice!
    | Posted on 2004-11-15 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Ann and I were sitting in the dark, the back seat of my fathers car. My mom and dad were in the front seat. We were dropping Ann off. She opened the door and as she stepped out, twisted back, kissed me on the lips and was gone, for that night at least.
    You reminded me of that, thanks.
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-06-19 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem "First Kiss"...Made a change in the last stanza, taking out, "My last Kiss" and letting it stand alone... Desi
    | Posted on 2004-06-19 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]


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