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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots
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    Author: ollie_wicked
    ASL Info:    27?FEarth
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 320/200/90
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       umm, pretty self explanitory. But I'm better....


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    So here i am.
    All alone in my cold room again.
    With no one other than my thoughts
    and memories.
    I try and sleep to pass the time
    the thoughts
    the you.
    But I wake up from this perfect world
    knowing that it can't ever happen.
    And I hate myself for even
    remotly missing you.
    And tears fall from name that
    I tell myself I am for missing you.
    And with each warm acidic tear
    they leave a streak of words.

    Weak
    Dependant
    Stupid

    And I hate myself even more
    for not being okay.
    After all this time,
    I'm still not ok.
    It's been 2 years
    of cutting
    and void filling.
    And after I try and find someone else
    I still find myself
    Back at ground zero.
    This lonely hole that
    in it's familarity is comforting.

    Weak
    Dependant
    Stupid

    Burning their already made paths
    They sting.
    And I hate myself.




    Submitted on 2007-07-31 00:06:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm sorry that you feel that way...no one should ever make you feel like that! But on a brighter note, i liked the ppem. You had some gopd imagery in there and a lot of emotion! Good job!
    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      dude.. shame on you for even feeling this way.. its not weak to want someone, or even to need someone. and its not stupid for you to miss the only person that ever showed a lot of interest in being SUPREMELY close to you. but you have got to move past it because bottom line he was NOT a good person for you.. and maybe remy is, maybe not but its worth it to take a chance.. and there are LOTS of people out there..you dont have to move backward.
    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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