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    dots Submission Name: In Angerdots

    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1348/375
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       ABAAB format; eight syllables per line.

    An observation.

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    dotsIn Angerdots

    It passes quickly, then returns.
    An ever-present malady,
    which grinds and growls. It aches and burns.
    Beneath the surface, magma churns
    to burst forth from the heart of me.

    A hairpin trigger, hammer-locked
    awaits to strike the coiled snake;
    ignition, dormant powder shocked
    a hail of curses flown, half-cocked,
    unleashed, as ravaged dogs awake.

    The wrath poured out in bitter blast
    as boiling pots snap brittle tops;
    the swirling currents, strong and fast,
    stampede as cattle, rumbling past
    to change the landscape where it drops.

    The Gadfly

    Submitted on 2007-07-31 06:44:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Haha. I think you've just described my uphill battle with my temper!!!!! "ever present malady" indeed. LOL.

    "magma churns" is fitting, too!
    | Posted on 2007-08-01 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
    Not bad at all my Friend
    In this write I believe you are speaking of the constant battle one fights with Negativity to keep a Positive clear good outlook on life
    The path as you and I and numerous others know is quite easy
    With God in your Life Nothing can erase the Beautiful life we Live
    Great Work Greg!!!
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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