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Author: xaingua
ASL Info:    16/Female/A quiet place
Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 11 /9 /11
Words: 123
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Lets look at the stars
From a view of the grass
Make memories sweeter
And wish they could last
Lets run to the hill top
and roll to its end
Lets grasp eachother tightly
as we quickly descend
You can drink of the ocean
Through lips that love me
and I'll fight off the blind ones
To jealouse to see

Lets steel away time
As Our hearts hickjack our minds
If your holding my hand
I can leave it behind
Lets rest here together
In dreams while we fly
Across the forest trees
That wave us good bye
I will lay in your arms
As we lie to the crowd
Then together we'll jump
And fall through the clouds.

Submitted on 2007-07-31 15:38:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow i really love this. it kind of reminds me of the summer time. its great how you described it.
| Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]

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