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    dots Submission Name: Letsdots
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    Author: xaingua
    ASL Info:    16/Female/A quiet place
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 11/9/11
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLetsdots
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    Lets look at the stars
    From a view of the grass
    Make memories sweeter
    And wish they could last
    Lets run to the hill top
    and roll to its end
    Lets grasp eachother tightly
    as we quickly descend
    You can drink of the ocean
    Through lips that love me
    and I'll fight off the blind ones
    To jealouse to see

    Lets steel away time
    As Our hearts hickjack our minds
    If your holding my hand
    I can leave it behind
    Lets rest here together
    In dreams while we fly
    Across the forest trees
    That wave us good bye
    I will lay in your arms
    As we lie to the crowd
    Then together we'll jump
    And fall through the clouds.






    Submitted on 2007-07-31 15:38:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i really love this. it kind of reminds me of the summer time. its great how you described it.
    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]


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