aw, thats rather cute- something any girl would like so see in lil purdey italics writing on a fancy card tied with a ribbon to a rose and a box of chocs. or maybe im just sentimental with a craving for chocolate hehe. good write man, good work.
Your ending is not what I would call subtle.
but i get the point. It almost sound like an ultimatum. You may want to try being a little more descriptive. I have a poem called *The Perfect Rose* I am not taking anything away from your list poem, but maybe reading my poem may give you another way to say what you wanna say.