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    dots Submission Name: trying too harddots

    Author: DontLetGo421
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118/238/141
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotstrying too harddots

    we've tried too hard to make this work
    and by a toss of your hand its gone
    everything lost in its nothingness
    this time i guess you have won

    you say words so completely bitter
    an open wound left to bleed and sting
    i wont let you get the best of me
    'cause i know what tomorrow brings

    you'll dwell on the words you shot
    and even worse the ones you held onto
    what can you say you brought to this
    atleast i can say i stayed true

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