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    dots Submission Name: Surprisedots
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    Author: lynn7
    ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419/288/103
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1171
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       This is a old one, that I wrote seven years ago.


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    dotsSurprisedots
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    Life is full of surprises......
    when we think we've lost
    all that was gained
    only to start at the beginning
    once more...
    of what was everything
    at the end
    we'll see love clearly
    for the first time
    thank God for our fall
    that brought us low
    now is the time
    to rise high again...together
    above all, our regrets and broken dreams
    the flight itself proves nothing
    for all departures leave the same
    It's the landfall that crowns our voyage!





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      so true all departures are the same.
    enjoyed this great poem
    much love
    | Posted on 2007-10-15 00:00:00 | by bilal anaim | [ Reply to This ]
      your ending is quite an interesting thought.
    all departures are alike... its the landing that makes or breaks us...

    i think if you were to bring a little punctuation to this piece, a couple of commas here and there it would definately bring a more crisp message through your words.

    i read this about the fall and i wonder which fall you are talking about. whether you are talking about The Fall of adam and eve in the garden or whether you are talking about the falls i experience almost daily when it comes to living my life for Him or whether you are talking about something else completely.

    i think it is an interesting idea to thank him for any of the above fall ideas. coz usually we only want to thank him when we are strong and when life is great.
    i was sharing with someone the other day that instead of new years resolutions i have a motto for the year. in 2002 my motto was 'the best year of my life so far' and i spent 4 months of it in a psych ward suffering depression and suicidality and all kindsa things that really dont contribute all that much to 'the best year of my life' and yet looking back it really was because that year equipped me to deal with the suicide of my boyfriend a coupla years later and then a vicious attack while travelling overseas on my own last year. if i hadnt have learnt about myself and how i work and how i interact with others and with god then i wouldnt have been able to get through such fallen moments as i have...

    so do i thank god for my depression etc?
    yes.
    do i thank him for my horrific experience last year?
    yes.
    because i know that he will use it, the way he has used everything that has happened in my life, for his glory and he will make it into a good thing...

    life does have so many surprises for us and we never know what is to come but we always know that god is faithful and he is always with us

    eeek. i got a little excited about this one... sorry for rambling
    | Posted on 2007-09-06 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely inspirational write! I always try to tell myself that the joys in life could not be half as appreciated if it were not for the down times. The "landfall that crowns our voyage" is a most wonderful way of looking at the fall. All my best to you, Sharon :-)
    | Posted on 2007-08-03 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Lynn, this is a good poem.
    I like to beleave that its the journey and not the destination. Thats how we become old and wise.
    | Posted on 2007-08-01 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      First off, I'd like to say "thank God for our fall" was probably my favourite line in this whole poem, it really stuck out at me. It was an overall unique poem and I was glad to see a not completely original idea portrayed in an orignal way. With that all I can say is great poem and keep writing.
    | Posted on 2007-08-01 00:00:00 | by Apple-Man | [ Reply to This ]


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