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    dots Submission Name: ive noticeddots

    Author: justkillme08
    ASL Info:    18/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 97/170/124
    Words: 339
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Before something bad happens

    Before theres that one final goodbye

    Something hits you

    That you dont relize

    Weather its that one last hug

    That feels like they dont want you to let go

    Or that final kiss of knowing you'll never kiss them not even once more

    The relization you to relize till the final goodbye is said

    Knowing that that last day spent together

    Was time of happiness

    It was his last kiss he gave me

    & that last hug goodbye

    We were already going down

    & i had already had relized it

    His last hug he gave

    Was a hug of never wanting to let go

    But I had to and i did

    & then my heart had turned cold

    It was that last day spent together

    Where I clung to him as if it was the last time i'd seen him

    Even though i didnt know that day would be the actually last day of seeing him

    It was the sound in his voice

    The look in his eyes

    The Knowing i'lll never be with him again

    That has mad me cry

    In Love once

    & Lust A few Times

    Not Regretting Much

    But one thing & I have relized

    Everything Always Happens For a reason

    & I finally know The feeling that i felt for my first love

    I can really feel for someone else

    Its just those lasts of a relationship

    kill and cut

    but knowing that i had a chance with them

    is something better than nothing at all

    ive matured and i know alot

    i would never hurt someone on purpose

    i would never cheat or lie

    the only thing i would do that would be bad or good

    is steal your heart and combine it with mine

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