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    dots Submission Name: Two Cups Of Joedots
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    Author: BCute
    ASL Info:    23/F/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 1295/1417/363
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 122
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 810



    Description:
       Sometimes you'd rather give yourself as a body to the person.

    And, I personally would.

    Than to ever let anyone see my soul.


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    dotsTwo Cups Of Joedots
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    Secrets spilled over
    cups of joe, black
    two lumps of sweetness
    to wash down bitterness.


    Rather a tumble
    rolling in the hay
    sinking furthur down
    without much to say.


    Love spoken out
    into night, pitch black
    smattering of stars
    to light moonlit escapades.


    Long for one night
    a kiss, a lay
    keep aloof
    emotion condemns.


    Anything but attatchment
    souls bared blasphemy
    instead sex suffices
    to keep him away.




    Submitted on 2007-08-01 12:59:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is an interesting and dangerous weapon: sex without intimacy. You capture well the loathing and anguish in this write, both for the writer and the intended target.

    Your lines very well laid (pardon the pun.)

    Greg
    | Posted on 2007-08-02 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this
    | Posted on 2007-08-01 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]


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