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    Author: Peachpitt
    ASL Info:    26/F/away from you
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 107/144/72
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Who knew such fun and sweet delight
    would soon become so sour?
    We were young above the moon in
    passion and ecstasy for another.

    Where did we stumble? I still donít know,
    but what I know is this:
    We had our hearts set on our dreams,
    rushing ahead with this love.
    And our hearts sang to each other in-
    different of anotherís weakness.

    But with each passing battle -
    testing; a brutal blow was dealt.
    And as we fought with all our might
    it just wasnít meant to be.

    Differences got the better of us
    and our hearts survived a war.
    But with too many scars; we
    broke apart - in tragedy.

    Sensations of emotion echo subtle;
    in to the deep of night.
    Such memories more recent; now
    become fewer in their number.

    Oh, how the nostalgia is quick
    to wash up over mine tongue
    and leave its bitter, sweet aftertaste
    of a memory - no longer.


    The past so rigidly unchanged, yet
    yesterday seems forever ago.
    But the winds will continue howling
    the name of the one Iíll always remember.




    Submitted on 2007-08-01 14:24:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very beautiful Rachael. Only it makes me think that you're longing for someone else. Am I reading too much into this?
    | Posted on 2007-08-04 00:00:00 | by brich2929 | [ Reply to This ]


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