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    dots Submission Name: A few words from my worlddots
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    Author: DrkRomeo_sGirl
    ASL Info:    16/f/somewhere in my mind
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 77/75/26
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 823
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    Description:
       i was sitting home one night on the coach , with a huge writers block coming on like a migrain that hit who like a brick. i started writing before the writers block took control.

    i wrote this to over come it.


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    dotsA few words from my worlddots
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    Pixie of the night
    No fright
    All might
    Put up my fist to fight
    Do what I have to do to survive
    Stay alive
    Mesmorize
    I can't deny
    My fate
    Soaring in the sky
    My power rebels
    See myself looking down,
    And seeing the pits of hell.
    Living in a world of fantasy and reality
    Oh my mentality.
    My insanity over comes me
    Step through the windows of my eyes
    you'll see.
    The world is my own personal hell.
    Only the wise can tell.




    Submitted on 2007-08-01 16:00:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a pretty good write for someone dealing with writers block. I have to admit that while some of it seems forced, the rest of it flows perfectly. I especially liked these lines the most:

    Living in a world of fantasy and reality
    Oh my mentality.

    It was just a big standout for me and it got me thinking about the organization of words.


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    | Posted on 2007-09-04 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
      ya know, it's always the abusers that get all the attention, i'm so happy we have this website to post our stuff. elite skilz of the abused. send me to the d-ward please....
    | Posted on 2007-08-15 00:00:00 | by esterhzys | [ Reply to This ]
      this was pretty good,
    not your best, but that doesn't make it bad.
    you're like an onion...
    you've got...lots of layers..
    ;)
    so many thoughts ...basically utter chaos...
    those are my favorite kind of writes...
    bravo..

    my favorite line:

    "this world is my own personal hell"
    "only the wise can tell"

    you really express your onioness in this one.
    definitely goin on favs.
    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      As long as you're looking down into hell you're all right. Your's seems to be a rather mild case of blues considering the wandering darkness found across many postings around here.

    I like the "fighting pixie" idea, it shows your spirit has spirit. Also the "soaring" bit is very positive. True insanity only comes when one does not recognize it or actively denies it. Anything else is a figure of speach that simply describes your situation.

    Good ideas and words here but you might elaborate on the "wise".
    | Posted on 2007-08-04 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the idea, but some of it seemed forced.
    But then again you had writers block so I applaud you for writing this in such an annoying time. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2007-08-04 00:00:00 | by hollowpain | [ Reply to This ]


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