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    dots Submission Name: The Private and the Poppiesdots
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    Author: Predator
    ASL Info:    21/m/Derbyshire, England
    Elite Ratio:    7.02 - 257/198/73
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       The duality of war...

    Spot the McCrae reference? :p Perhaps too blatant.
    Note: No specific war. Don't try to guess... :)


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    dotsThe Private and the Poppiesdots
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    The Private looks up over the Jerry cans and spent cases
    We are men of free-will. We love and are loved.
    We have freedom of thought,
    Freedom of conscience.
    Yet we are sent to bleed, to die in foreign lands.
    We are men
    We should be free.

    We are not men, the Corporal replies,
    Were soldiers.
    Our will is not free; it has been bought
    For a shilling and a sense of security.
    Our freedom is in our hearts, not in our action.
    We are not men; we are soldiers.
    We have sold ourselves.
    We will do our duty.

    Without another murmur
    They pass on their notes
    And climb over the top
    Into a cloud of smoke and gunfire
    And fall among the poppies




    Submitted on 2007-08-01 17:32:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      And fall among the poppies? Why poppies, is it a double reference maybe - since poppies often imply sleep. So, the sleep of death, or maybe that death is a rest for soldiers - or a peace for them. Also, the commonly depicted poppy is red, red symbolizes ardent love, sin, passions and angers.

    We have sold ourselves.

    I like the contrast of men against soldiers, men are feeling and soldiers are killing-machines, right? I do not agree, but you performed the point rather nicely.


    -M.
    | Posted on 2007-08-01 00:00:00 | by Mandolin | [ Reply to This ]


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