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    dots Submission Name: dont givedots
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    Author: DontLetGo421
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118/238/141
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsdont givedots
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    we're trying all to hard to make this work
    we thought it was flawless but i found the kirk
    you'll find new victims so i will wish them luck
    cause i dont care anymore yeah i dont give a fuck

    maybe for their sake you'll learn to have heart
    you stood at the finish line and i left at the start
    ill give them reason when all they know is their name
    always so bitter that now you deserve to play the game

    no you havent been mistaken, i have grabbed hold
    i'll tell you this once so remember what you are told
    to play with peoples lives is a sick trait to have
    if you truly need this shit to strive, bring it to the lav




    Submitted on 2007-08-01 18:44:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it is very good ~it could be a very good rap ~
    just a few changes and it could be a hit!
    i would do the changes if you let me~

    | Posted on 2007-08-01 00:00:00 | by lyricvixen | [ Reply to This ]


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