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    dots Submission Name: Stitchesdots
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    Author: Keiran
    ASL Info:    20/M/NZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 40/47/33
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1691
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 701



    Description:
       A free comment if you guess what inspired this. Ha!

    ~Keiran~


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    dotsStitchesdots
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    It's hard to talk.
    Through a mouthful of stitches.
    It's even harder to smile.
    So forgive me if I seem a little dull today.

    Forgive me if I don't laugh.
    It's probably just the painkillers.
    They make me a little drowsy.
    I'm sure you are [somewhat] funny.

    I'm sorry if life doesn't seem all that great,
    right now.
    You see,
    i'm missing the point.
    Of this little exercise,
    I think it's called pain

    I almost cried
    And that [probably] never happens

    So just go away.
    I'll deal with it,
    when your gone.




    Submitted on 2007-08-02 06:56:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I just got 18 stitches taken out of my arm.
    I never want to do that again.
    (i look like an extra from some slasher film, i do...)

    ... And it's funny, but on painkillers, I was laughing a lot.

    Anyway. It's not a typical depression/etc. poem. It's a little refreshing. A lot, even. Hm. I'm feeling brainless at the moment.
    Nice job.



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    | Posted on 2008-06-06 00:00:00 | by sadtrapofgravit | [ Reply to This ]
      Can't I just get a free comment for being me? :)

    ...No? Daaaamn.

    I agree with your last reviewer. Doubtful is dead on. I don't know how you got that out of me, but whatever you used is pretty creative and a bit inspiring.

    I'mma gonna guess and see if it was something other than a band or a music artist.

    -Hospital

    -Something or someplace abandoned

    -You attic (Yes, seriously.)

    -A single line in a song. Not the song itself, just a line.

    -The closest park to your house

    -A friend who you can never think of what to say to

    -A conversation with yourself

    Okay, I'm out of guesses. And no, those weren't random, I swear. I'll tell you how I thought of each guess if you give me a comment. :D

    P.S.: Tell me what inspired it after someone guesses correctly. I want to know.
    | Posted on 2007-08-02 00:00:00 | by Darkess | [ Reply to This ]
      I have a lot of different ideas of who this person can be. Some might be idiotic, but I want that free comment:

    -Hellraiser

    -Lindsay Lohan

    -Pete Doherty

    -Kid from Salad Fingers

    -Someone from Slipknot/Korn

    -A Hardcore band

    -Evanescence

    That is all I can think of.

    And this poem makes me feel doubtful of myself. Good effect.
    | Posted on 2007-08-02 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]


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