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    dots Submission Name: My Nightly Praydots

    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 458
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       On Old Poem Of mine that I would like to tweak, so please give your advice.

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    dotsMy Nightly Praydots

    My Nightly Pray

    As I lay myself to down to sleep, I hope that your memory does not creep…

    Hours of darkness steal my light and still my memories of you radiate so bright.
    Unable to believe that you still remain, believing we had severed all the chains.
    Closing my eyes you yet again transpire bringing about my one deepest desire.
    Powerless to chase away my dream and too exhausted to make an effort to scream.
    My eyes are wide open once more, transversely the room my eyes start to explore.
    Shadows of you creep slowly in my mind as if you and me are completely entwined.

    If I cry before the daybreaks, I pray it will alleviate my heartaches….

    A tear drips quietly down my cheek as my whispers to you like a ghost I speak.
    Hopefully, you will sense my phantom moan and recall the love we once shown.
    Until then I will continue to pray that you will be in love with me again someday.
    My passion for you will remain and un still hours of darkness generate in me pain.
    Daybreak emerges its light yet another time and the breeze wakes the wind chime.
    All is peaceful for me once more until the night closes on me its dark looming doors.

    Submitted on 2007-08-02 09:31:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that was a cool poem i liked it nice job keep up the good work.

    | Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]

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