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    dots Submission Name: Illusions (Pantoum Poem)dots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Illusions (Pantoum Poem)


    Saturating the bedroom with hushed illusion of rain.
    Coloring the dawn with echoes from bliss in pain.
    Not eager to face emotions, just wish to run away.
    Electric blue as the oceans, spirited like lovers sway.

    Coloring the dawn with echoes from the bliss in pain.
    Painting phantoms on the walls from shadows again.
    Electric blue as the oceans, spirited like lovers sway.
    Sparring with these hallucinations, demanding to play.

    Painting phantoms on the walls from shadows again.
    Illustrating a mural about our passion for me to retain.
    Sparring with these hallucinations, demanding to play.
    Aware our passion will soon vanish to a wintry gray.

    Concealing my vision to exile my nearing final day.
    Not eager to face emotions, just wish to run away.
    Consequently my memory refuses to remain sane.
    Saturating the bedroom with hushed illusion of rain.




    Submitted on 2007-08-02 09:34:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      im not sure if this is just your style but the thoughts run in to one another i get lost and confused i just cant get the meaning and gramma wise its off example hushed illusion of rain doesnt make since then again you may be goign for that mystery but it just not flow right to me i am reading more of your stuff so i can get a better feel of your style
    | Posted on 2007-08-02 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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