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    dots Submission Name: Elephant Kissdots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 336
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 360
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    Description:
       I was writing this and thought of a story by Dr. Suess can't remember the name of it now. I just remember that is was about a little boy who was told to be learn to have a imagination, so that is were the idea of this came from.



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    Elephant Kiss

    Mother, Mother! Listen to this, on my way home I got me an elephant kiss.
    No,this is not a tall tale this time, I have proof; I still have the elephant slime.
    I know that you don't like me to lie, you always say I tell tales just to be sly.
    Even so, this one is true it has to be, will you pretty please this time believe me?

    I was on my home from the store today, I had a monkey ask me to play.
    No! I said that would make me late, and that my mother would really hate.
    So on my way I went and before long, I heard a lion singing a pretty song.
    He stopped and said; please sing with me, No! I will be late and that I can't be.

    This went on all the way to the house, that is until I stepped on a mouse.
    That's when it happened you see, that is when the silly elephant kissed me!
    He was glad the mouse was dead, cause it scared him right out of his bed.
    See he told me how it scared him too, how he smashed and bashed the zoo.

    You see the story it goes on something like this, it's a tale that you can't miss.
    The mouse jumped on the elephants head, and scared him out of his bed.
    The elephant didn't know what to do, so he ran so fast that he almost flew.
    He ran into this and into that, oh yea, he even let out that old creepy bat.

    He smashed and crashed his way throughout, flinging things with his snout.
    So, the animals he did set free, that is why they were stopping to talk to me.
    But I knew this you wouldn't believe, that's why I brought the slime with me.
    Oh! The bread, now I have a story to tell, I had to feed it to the crocs in the well.




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