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    dots Submission Name: Our Pathdots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 386
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    Bytes: 694



    Description:
       Yet another Pantoum poem


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    dotsOur Pathdots
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    Our Path

    Meandering down our path today.
    Upon the path where our kiss grew.
    My eyes see the elms softly sway.
    Creating passion in the naive dew.

    Upon the path where our kiss grew.
    My memories flutter away to stray.
    Creating passion in the naive dew
    Dreaming you would always stay.

    My memories flutter away to stray.
    To the day love was all we knew.
    Dreaming you would always stay.
    Memorizing each fragment of you.

    Enchanted by my fantasies of you.
    My eyes see the elms softly sway.
    Our love evaporates with the dew.
    Meandering down our path today.




    Submitted on 2007-08-02 09:39:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A difficlut form but when it is well done--as it is here!--it is most potent and most lovely. More people should attempt forms....I loved it... bravo... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-08-22 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh, such is love in the naive dew! You've captured a truth most of us have faced at some stage of life. I liked the repeated lines and rhyming required for your pantoum. I'm always happy to meet another writer who enjoys form and look forward to reading more of your work. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-08-19 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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