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    dots Submission Name: cacoondots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Hello lovey
    You look well
    Where were you ?
    What game shall we play ?
    Your butterfly sufficates
    Twisted in sticky web
    The pills go down easier
    Still no dreams come
    The words meld togeather
    Smeared,like so many faces
    Where have you been ?

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