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Why Don't You Ever Talk?

Author: 7makaveli
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This one is about those silent ones who never seem to talk, trust me they have much to say. It picks up in the second half, I was trying a different rhyme scheme in the first half but got lazy and switched back, you'll notice...

Why Don't You Ever Talk?

I have nothing good to tell you, just sorrow, believe me,
I'd rather just dream away tomorrow,
Maybe it's just today, but I have lost the will to live,
I have nothing left to say, or nothing left to give,
You on the other hand have much on your mind,
Meaning much less time to spend on your misery,
I once could describe your simple things vividly,
Until I started questioning what's the point?
But again you ask me to speak, saying that I'm boring you,
But never stop to think that confidence ain't my virtue,
Your persona overpowers me just like your essence,
I am thoroughly intimidated by your presence,
And dominated in almost every way,
From my social status to how much I weigh,
I would argue that these things are what make me special,
But lets face it, this reassurance would be artificial,
I stopped caring about the world when it did the same to me,
I don't know which happened first, memory lost conveniently,
My problem is I get too attached to whom I speak,
So now I choose to define the opposite of loyalty,
I've been hurt too many times by people like you, pretending you care about me, or won't go nowhere without me,
So this is my way of fighting back the isolation,
Though I don't believe this fight has a clear destination,
I know you hate being around me cause I see the glass half empty,
The idea of putting me down now is probably very tempting,
But I've hit rock bottom, I can't go any lower,
This is the only way that I can be surer,
I'm at the bottom of the mountain no surprise that I am bolder,
I have nothing left to lose, I'm a shellshocked soldier,
Now that you know what I have to say, I'm sure you will leave me,
I have nothing good to tell you, just sorrow, believe me,
I'd rather just dream away tomorrow...

Submitted on 2007-08-03 00:25:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I agree... one way or another we've all felt this way though we may think we are the only one that feels this way. Despite how hard it is to talk.. to express ourselves when we feel so low.. we have to... and what really matters is that we do express ourselves, but most importantly that we realize this sadness will pass and life does go on and does get better. :)

i really liked your poem... it was really good. and i liked how it turned out towards the end.. :) definately ones of my favs.. :D
| Posted on 2007-08-03 00:00:00 | by MidnightMelody | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not much of the silent type when it comes to feelings, but I believe mostly everyone has felt this way in one way or another in there life. You did a great job of expressing what it feels like to be lost and falling into a depression. Also, hitting bottom sometimes is what is needed to gain a perspective on life, as long as you can come back up after you hit. Good work.
Love and Peace,
| Posted on 2007-08-03 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]

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