Also quite ambiguous. I'm not sure what you're talking about here: there are nice images, but absolutely no narrative thread--no sense of a personality behind the words, and no sense of who or what you're trying to portray. I think that, before you focus on the imagery, you have to know the personality of the piece--to give it a soul of its own. That's what will impact people the most.
Another problem is your mixed word use/choice. "Shall you take/ to cleanse again." "A tainted stone/ burns more sour/ than the painted lies." What are you trying to say? It doesn't make sense, really; at least not in the current phrasing.
I liked the lines:
"And why clutter
your vacant shelves
while mine stand full"
because they show some sort of relationship between the voice of the poem and the object of her speech.
Overall, it's interesting, but nothing to write home about. My advice is to try and keep some thread of similarity running through the piece--to give the reader a sense of progression and of narrative. Poems have stories too, you see.
Submission Name: Take your Weight, Live it up
