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    dots Submission Name: I Praydots
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    Author: VivaLaVina
    ASL Info:    20..F..Malaysia
    Elite Ratio:    5.91 - 13/12/9
    Words: 364
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 65
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       A heartfelt prayer for my beloved one.


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    dotsI Praydots
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    I pray,
    As I cry along the heaven's tears,
    To show sincerity,
    For my words to reach heaven,
    As I'm willing to give up my eyesight;
    Just as...

    I pray,
    For you to get well,
    And return to my embrace,
    As I await your comfort,
    To see the smile I long;
    As...

    I pray,
    To ask for your permission,
    For me to hold your hand,
    As we'd walk together,
    As one,
    To never leave you alone to face danger;
    And...

    I pray,
    To be able to stay strong,
    Upon my weak heart,
    Against your shattered soul;
    For again...

    I pray,
    To keep my soul with you,
    As a companion of yours,
    To walk through the swallowing sea;
    For eternity...

    I pray,
    For you to understand,
    I am truly yours forever,
    And the promises kept,
    Upon my soul,
    And I shall let you know the true meaning of lovers;
    They stay as one,
    From the day they accepted each other,
    Fear nothing,
    Nor death shall come close;
    For that...

    I pray,
    Please let me stay closer to you,
    I do not wish for you to be alone,
    As I would feel the pain you're suffering,
    As I've seen couples like us,
    Staying strong,
    As I had vow not to let go;
    As I continue...

    To pray,
    For you to break free,
    To be able to think for solutions,
    And not mull over the unworthy thoughts,
    For I'll hold your hand,
    To ease your fearing soul;
    As will...

    I pray,
    That you will end my life,
    If that someday...
    That one day you decided to put me aside;
    And with my tears...

    I pray,
    You'll live,
    Just for me,
    As I would pray,
    Just for you.





    Submitted on 2007-08-03 08:49:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem was of it's own form of originality and it really touched me in every word you created. It almost made me want to cry also...This is of what true love is, and you're prayer shall not be taken in vein. I like how the last sentence of each stanza flowed into the very next one, very good work. And I think people should consider in giving a better comment that of the lame one the last and only person has left you. My favorite line was:



    And I shall let you know the true meaning of lovers;
    They stay as one,
    From the day they accepted each other,
    Fear nothing,
    Nor death shall come close;
    For that...
    I Pray

    Very deep,I like that you state that you will fear nothing. Nothing should come close to sever a relationship as strong as you have written the love for your significant of other...I don't really comment on these types of poems, but I just had to...Because your poem is beginning to put tears into my eyes...


    Thank you.
    | Posted on 2007-08-16 00:00:00 | by Crestfallenman | [ Reply to This ]
      AAAH! I loved it! that was amazing! I'm not in a critic mood, so I'm just going to say WOW! at first I thought it was like... a prayer, but now i see that it's a prayer--not to god--to someone you love, excellently done.
    | Posted on 2007-08-04 00:00:00 | by Hyperbolypses | [ Reply to This ]



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