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    dots Submission Name: When I Diedots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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    dotsWhen I Diedots
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    And when I die
    They値l sing of me
    Who went away on the cool blue sea.
    And never more when the cold wind blows,
    And the leaves turn gold before the snows
    Will I come back on a frigate tall,
    I値l heed no bell and I値l heed no call.

    And when I die
    My soul will be
    On a ship that痴 bound for eternity,
    I値l span the stars while the solar flares
    Lift me like steps up celestial stairs,
    The songs of heaven will lead me nigh
    To that final port when the echoes die.




    Submitted on 2007-08-03 10:25:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very good write..u can tell you put a lot of thought into how it was written and how each word flowed into the next.

    And when I die
    My soul will be
    On a ship that痴 bound for eternity,
    I値l span the stars while the solar flares
    Lift me like steps up celestial stairs,

    on a ship thats bound for eternity..that is possibly , one of the most poetic things that ive read. ive written poems some what like this before , and I love reading them everytime. im looking forward to reading more of your work.
    Holly
    | Posted on 2007-09-01 00:00:00 | by hollybear08 | [ Reply to This ]
      may we all die as such. tho the thought of you perishing weights my heart. a soulful piece of dark pristine beauty. "when the echoes die" how perfect
    | Posted on 2007-08-18 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful! To sail away on a masted ship to eternity! This delightful poem sings such a romantic and spiritual song about one's journey after death; a most difficult subject to master, and yet you have accomplished it as if it were easy! This was delightful!

    I've been on holiday and went to the Ranch for a couple of weeks, so have not been able to read and comment on posts.
    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      wow I got the chills at the end of this....it had such great words in it..I loved it! :)
    | Posted on 2007-08-03 00:00:00 | by Hazel eyes Jess | [ Reply to This ]


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