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    dots Submission Name: The Murderer by Luke Kennarddots

    Author: Lord Bane
    ASL Info:    24/M/Isle of Wight, UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 40/81/50
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A poem by my brother-in-law.

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    dotsThe Murderer by Luke Kennarddots

    I take the murderer for coffee.
    'Make sure you don't murder your coffee!'
    I joke. He likes my jokes.
    Later I swing a plank into his face:
    This is to stop him enjoying himself -
    Which is integral to the rehabilitation process.
    His mouth trickles blood like a tap quarter-turned.
    He likes my analogies. 'Hey, Murderer!'
    I yell, 'Murdered anyone recently?'
    The murderer likes to play badminton.
    When he loses, I say, 'That's what you get for being a murderer.'
    When he wins, I say,
    'I guess you got yourself in pretty good shape
    Murdering all those people.'
    I'm not about to let the murderer forget he's a murderer.
    When I dance with the murderer I let him lead
    Because he is the more proficient dancer -
    'Just be careful not to murder me!' I tease.
    The prison sits on the horizon like a great ash-tray -
    When we travel I give him the window seat.
    'Hey, murderer, would you like a sandwich?' I say,
    'Or would you rather murder someone?'
    The murderer eats his cheese and ham sandwich.
    'The forecast is for snow,' I tell him.

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      Interesting and witty. I don't quite get the joke behind the last line though. What is it?
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

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