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    dots Submission Name: The Whispers of a Phasedots
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    Author: Fadeintoreality
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsThe Whispers of a Phasedots
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    She steps through phases like she's running from a fire
    The whispers follow even when the grave is no longer hollow
    And the fragments of a smile dangle, broken on desire
    The throbbing heart, the weaker organ, is forced to swallow.

    Mother, will you cradle her, until her breathing remains soft and deep
    Stroke her hair until the sun comes up, bleeding through the white sheets
    Mother, will you hold her hand, as she unfolds quiet promises for you to keep
    Will you promise, on your own flesh, that the pain shall not defeat?

    As the snow falls on my face, the ice crunches underneath me
    To the floor I go, like silent portraits hanging up on rusty nails
    Through all the sin I uttered, I never once thought I would have to plea
    But here I am, on both knees, drinking in all that i have failed.

    Mother, will you cradle me, for my bones lie here broken
    Stroke the hair that i have left
    And hold my withered, lifeless hand
    For I am only a child.
    Mother, I adore thee,
    Stay with me until the sun comes up, because the whispers never leave.




    Submitted on 2007-08-03 15:34:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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