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    dots Submission Name: Crazy But Truedots
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    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 314
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 781
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       This poem came striaght from the heart one night when my b/f gave me a writing book and said this could be your journal and gladly this was the first poem I wrote I know it's not one of my best but I hope ya'll like it:):P


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    dotsCrazy But Truedots
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    Something I call crazy
    Something I call true
    Thinking in the now is all I do
    It's true I fell in love with you
    It took me by suprise
    The first time you looked in my eyes
    Something inside me rised
    A smile lit up my face
    It was like I was like I was seeing an angel from from grace
    My heart still at steady pace
    By this time I have let my gaurd down
    Knowing this time there's no clowing around
    Believe it or not but this is real
    The way he's making me feel...unreal
    It's like I'm a school girl falling head over heels
    One day though you took my heart away
    You placed it in your hands and said
    This is were you stay
    He put his hands to his chest
    Kissed my lips and said I'll love you best
    That night he lay me down
    And told me I'm here through the night
    And if something ain't right hold me tight
    No nightmares I'll scare them all away
    I close my eyes
    And we begin to pray
    To have what we got and to try our best not to let it slip away
    Monday morning it's a rainy day
    I love the rain so I go out with my friend MJ
    Come back inside play some video games
    But the day did not go in my favor
    And you saw me cry
    Even when I told you I was fine
    You looked at me and said stop lying
    I shook my head and took a deep breathe
    And without a word I knew
    You passed the test
    Which got me more emotional as could be
    Sat down with a pen
    And let it all free
    Crazy But True
    You know the matter is
    I Love You!







    Submitted on 2007-08-03 22:52:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Such an expression of young love, it certainly was a joy to read and takes me back. The rhymes were decent, I thought, and I get the sense that it was coming right from the heart through the haze in the head the love causes. He sounds like everything you could want or need. Congratulations on that.
    -Q
    | Posted on 2007-08-05 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i can relate so well...but ur looking for thoughts witch the only one that comes to mind is wow considering i write mostly dark i do rather enjoy reading love like poems i only wish my only writing would transpond to this happy side i envy ur talent keep writting!
    ~jess~
    | Posted on 2007-08-04 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]


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