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Crazy But True

Author: Hip-Hop Honey
ASL Info:    16/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31
Words: 314
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This poem came striaght from the heart one night when my b/f gave me a writing book and said this could be your journal and gladly this was the first poem I wrote I know it's not one of my best but I hope ya'll like it:):P

Crazy But True

Something I call crazy
Something I call true
Thinking in the now is all I do
It's true I fell in love with you
It took me by suprise
The first time you looked in my eyes
Something inside me rised
A smile lit up my face
It was like I was like I was seeing an angel from from grace
My heart still at steady pace
By this time I have let my gaurd down
Knowing this time there's no clowing around
Believe it or not but this is real
The way he's making me feel...unreal
It's like I'm a school girl falling head over heels
One day though you took my heart away
You placed it in your hands and said
This is were you stay
He put his hands to his chest
Kissed my lips and said I'll love you best
That night he lay me down
And told me I'm here through the night
And if something ain't right hold me tight
No nightmares I'll scare them all away
I close my eyes
And we begin to pray
To have what we got and to try our best not to let it slip away
Monday morning it's a rainy day
I love the rain so I go out with my friend MJ
Come back inside play some video games
But the day did not go in my favor
And you saw me cry
Even when I told you I was fine
You looked at me and said stop lying
I shook my head and took a deep breathe
And without a word I knew
You passed the test
Which got me more emotional as could be
Sat down with a pen
And let it all free
Crazy But True
You know the matter is
I Love You!

Submitted on 2007-08-03 22:52:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Such an expression of young love, it certainly was a joy to read and takes me back. The rhymes were decent, I thought, and I get the sense that it was coming right from the heart through the haze in the head the love causes. He sounds like everything you could want or need. Congratulations on that.
| Posted on 2007-08-05 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
  wow i can relate so well...but ur looking for thoughts witch the only one that comes to mind is wow considering i write mostly dark i do rather enjoy reading love like poems i only wish my only writing would transpond to this happy side i envy ur talent keep writting!
| Posted on 2007-08-04 00:00:00 | by gothicgirl | [ Reply to This ]

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