um...i have no big words to compliment you being as i could barely understand yours...it's a good thing i can put two and two together other i would have NO idea. haha damn my shrunken vocabulary! well anways, i liked it!
I have to say I'm impressed with this piece. For having the appearance of being flippant and frenetic the structure and form is dead right, and the context is well articulated. Personally I have no problem with the spelling and grammar- as long as it's close enough that I can hear it right in my head, that's what counts. I never use spell check- kind of feels like I'd be cheapening the art of it. As for the contents of the write- I find it relatable. Sometimes I feel like my soul is dead and my body and brain are just keeping up appearences. If thats what you were trying to convey (I hate to ever assume I interpreted correctly) I felt it through the piece extensively.
I'm old and will say that no matter how old you become those shades of gray are always there. Appreciate the ability to see them---some people only recognize black and white! I like rhyme and appreciated yours. Your message came through clearly. There are some typos and/or misspellings that spell check would catch if you care to give that a try. Do pen on! Better days are ahead. Sharon