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    dots Submission Name: Transylvania by Tom Fletcher/Dougie Poynterdots
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    Author: Lord Bane
    ASL Info:    24/M/Isle of Wight, UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 40/81/50
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 1093
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1284



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       I know I didn't write this, but I love this song and I'm suffering fom writer's block right now anyway. Hope you enjoy, I'd love to know what you think its about


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    dotsTransylvania by Tom Fletcher/Dougie Poynterdots
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    Anne Boleyn, she kept a tin
    Which all her hopes and dreams were in
    She plans to run away with him forever
    (Never to be seen again)
    Leaves a note and starts to choke
    Can feel the lump that's in her throat
    Its raining and she leaves her coat in silence

    I'm sorry but we disagree,
    The boy is vermin, can't you see
    We'll drown his sins in misery
    And rip him out of history

    People marching to the drums
    Everybody's having fun to the sound of love
    And ugly is the world we're on, if I'm right then prove me wrong
    I'm stunned to find a place we belong

    Who is your lover? I couldn't tell
    When hell freezes over? That's when I'll tell
    Who is your lover? I couldn't tell, when will this stop?

    Racing, pacing, in the dark
    She's searching for a lonely heart
    She finds him but his heart has stopped
    She breaks down

    We're sorry but your Majesty
    Refusing orders from the Queen
    Results in a monstrosity
    Remembers a voice and hears him sing

    (People marching.... and Who is... till the end of the song)




    Submitted on 2007-08-05 09:35:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      the first half of this piece could easily be turned into a song, nice write though

    Brian
    | Posted on 2007-08-05 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]


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