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    Author: justkillme08
    ASL Info:    18/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    1.63 - 97/170/124
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    boy you got me tossing and turning
    dreaming and hoping
    wishing that the day will come
    where our hearts will become one

    days turn to nights
    and nights turn to weeks
    weeks into months
    and still no luck

    but i wont give up
    i cant give up
    everything about you boy
    drives me crazie
    and you still dont have a girl

    whats it gunna take for you to see
    me and you are ment to be
    i'll take your hand
    and i'll kiss you lipz
    just give me a chance boy
    i could be everything you ever wished




    Submitted on 2007-08-05 12:19:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this poem...its really good. i like the way it flows easily and how its not forced. i too feel like this about someone. so...whos this about?
    | Posted on 2007-09-09 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]


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